Beast Fiend

This here is my beauty. Β A story about a soul reborn in the fantasy world with mgiht and magic. There also is a harem, which I enjoy developing a lot.

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Prologue
Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Chapter 6
Chapter 7
Chapter 8
Chapter 9
Chapter 10
Chapter 11
Chapter 12
Chapter 13
Chapter 14
Chapter 15
Chapter 16
Chapter 17
Chapter 18
Chapter 19
Chapter 20
Chapter 21
Chapter 22
Chapter 23
Chapter 24
Chapter 25
Chapter 26
Chapter 27
Chapter 28
Chapter 29
Chapter 30
Chapter 31
Chapter 32
Chapter 33
Chapter 34
Chapter 35
Chapter 36
Chapter 37
Chapter 38
Chapter 39
Chapter 40
Chapter 41
Chapter 42
Chapter 43
Chapter 44
Chapter 45
Chapter 46
Chapter 47
Chapter 48
Chapter 49
Chapter 50
Chapter 51
Chapter 52
Chapter 53
Chapter 54
Chapter 55

Ok, I can’t abandon Zern just yet. The updates won’t be daily, but I am writing some more every now and then.

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Bonus chapters:

Chapter 38.5 [NSFW]

40 thoughts on “Beast Fiend”

  1. Hi, been a lurker on the RR site for awhile and got to say I enjoyed your story. I understand about leaving this story because of the flack you got, but honestly fuck ’em. If you’re not getting payed for it then why the fuck should negative criticism like that be important? I’m not admonishing you for quitting, I’d quit shit for way way worst reasons. I’m just saying RR is full of egotistic assholes and trolls, most of the negative criticism you got is probably by these individuals. Honestly, RR is so popular but at the same time the community is literally the most shit crusted community I’ve ever concerned myself with, this coming from someone who is big on multiple gaming communities throughout the years (not all the best and a lot of assholes plague the internet). I can understand hating the flack, but don’t take anything affiliated with RR seriously, honestly I wouldn’t read at that site if it didn’t attract so many authors.

  2. Didn’t really say all I wanted to last reply. Anyways, it’s been a good reading and I hope to see more of your work some time. I actually mean that, most of the stories on RR and otherwise are not that great, putting it as gently as possible. Hope to see some more enjoyable stories from you, good luck.

  3. Hi, Well I was just a silent reader until now, but seriously I’m kind of fed up with those people since your story is one of my favorite… ( and that’s not the first time authors stopped writing because of those trash )
    I realy like the girls you created and the fact that all of them are different, the sweet love between them and the MC and the fact that I was as sad as the MC when he was betrayed ( I mean, if the reader can feels what the MC feels isn’t it wonderful ? )
    I was realy eager to read your story and all the more because it was updated everyday.
    Anyway Thanks for your writing, wether when the hiatus end or if you start another story, I’ll be sure to follow!

    1. i agree i too am a silent reader that’s fed up by all this negativity destroying good and promising fics. i would sincerely love to continue reading this fic and hope that u one day continue it and to be honest fuck RRL since u got this site. well anyway if you really will cancel this fic i would be real sad and i want u to know that this site will always have a bookmark on my browser.

  4. I was following this fiction of yours in RR and I liked it quite a bit. I really wished you ignored the bad comments and continue writing it. The story was good, the pacing too… you had a couple of points which you could polish a little more, but for it being your first fiction you were doing great (I’ve read far worse fics, and some of them weren’t first-timers).

    If you have any chapters written which you’ve left unpublished, I’d like to ask you to publish them here, I’d really like to know how the story follows.
    If you don’t have any, I can only hope that one day you’ll regain your spirit and write more of this story, leading it to a good end. It is worth of it, and it’d be a pity that such a good story was left unfinished, like many others.

    I really wish you gave another chance to Zern and the girls…

    Please cheer up and pay no heed to the comments other people make, your story is yours and yours only. If someone doesn’t like your story, nobody force them to read it, if they do so it’s out of their own will, so they have no right to critisize the author!

  5. Constructive criticism can help improve your story for the future.
    Those that just hate the flow should just write their own story and you should ignore them.

    Be like the MC during the trail. Sticks and stones may break your bones but your spirit would come out stronger. I suggest using a timeline planner to plan the story better.

  6. I appreciate your work and thanks for the good story. If you don’t continue this one so be it. Then thanks so far give me a heads up if you write another one. And for the people you piled on negative reviews on you just tell them to f off and write for yourself. Take it easy.

  7. Well i’ve been a follower of your work in RR, and i really like it, and i admit in the chapter where the MC went to the human kingdom and witness what transpire “The Glorious Plan” (later i found out that the plan consist of Eleanor marrying the king, consummating their marriage and finally killing him) i was dumbfounded, confused and pissed because like the MC i didn’t know what just transpire while he was away.

    after the author was forced to release up to chapter 27, i was like holy Sh*t so that’s what happen, but still i was like maybe they should at least send a messenger or something so zern will know what will happen while he’s away (but like i said the plan was actually eleanor marrying the king and so on) so the messenger thing will not work because zern will clearly not going to accept such plan, but still Eleanor,leah,and lilith should have known that this “betreyal plan” will make their relationship with zern not the same, though they may think apologizing may be enough and he forgave them, it may affect the rites for their marriage and he will reject them.

    anyway after that now here comes the chapter 28 the punishment chapter,
    admit i was disappointed because after apologizing to zern they revealed their Glorious Plan to zern which Eleanor marrying the king and so on, (god it pissed me off so much that their plan was actually that despite zerns reaction after aedim almost getting raped) and zern only did was get angry for a moment, got pissed for getting blame for a moment, and then whip eleanor, leah and lilith, until their crying, anyway i was all smile when zern said that he will exclude the three because of what they did (i was like oh wow you go zern, show those bitches the real men, they now should start try to earn your trust back) the i saw the “yet” i was like why did he say “yet”?, i know that zern will forgive them but at least make them earn it back so they will learn their lesson, but he clearly said “yet” so they already know that they will be forgiven,
    it’s like a child getting punish for his misdeed by his parent he already know that he will be forgiven, so the guilt and regret on what he done is not there.

    so anyway the rest of the chapters was good 29-to the chapter where zern won the duel with regios, it’s just the punishment i i think it’s too light, that’s why i think people is angry with, so yeah the only thing i want to ask is a little bit of guilt trip to the three girls so they learn their lesson.

    thats all though you have drop this already in RR ,i wish you still continue this on your wordpress, and i will still read it.
    peacec :D

    1. what i meant in guilt tripping is that make them feel like zern is rejecting them making them regret the actions they did, but eventually mellowed out when he think the three girls had enough
      ,
      but holy sh*t chapter 36 is just wow!, he born a sadistic beast inside him because of eleanor and co. ‘s plan.

  8. Please don’t quit writing this series just because of the comments of some haters. But if you can’t stand posting it on Royal Road, at least continue to post it here where your greatest fans go. I really want to know what happens in the story.

  9. After seeing you post on RRL that you weren’t continuing Beast Fiend I rushed over to see if you’d added any chapters here before the announcement, and I was pleasantly surprised to find not one or two but 9!

    I have to say that after reading these 9 new chapters I’m even more disappointed about you dropping the story. I really enjoyed it right from the start, and only had misgivings about the treatment of the Bloodborn due to the three’s betrayal and how it seemed like you’d set it up for Zern to forgive them too easily. If I came across too aggressive or as a “hater” then I apologise, that was never my intent. Honestly I’d have liked a bit more of a focus on the three’s suffering due to him pushing them away after the whipping, but the resolution in chapter 28 addressed all my concerns and what you’ve done afterwards has continued to hold the high standards you’ve shown throughout this fiction. I really find it hard to believe this is your first, given the depth of the world and characters. Sure there are some spelling and grammatical errors, and maybe you haven’t made full use of the political landscape without me noticing or something, but no one is perfect and you haven’t mentioned having a proof-reader.

    I will really miss Zern and the girls, and I’ll be leaving this page bookmarked in the hope you pick this up again. I wish you the best of luck with the stories to come.

    1. Don’t worry I harbor no hard feelings towards anybody, I just can’t continue with the beast fiend as of now. I need to get rid of all the negativity. I might continue or rework it at a later date, but right now I will do something else. I might have some other work to post later on.

  10. I may not have like the punishment the girls received, after reading everything currently posted it seems that the punishment will be throughout their lives. Perfect. They goofed and it has lasting consequences. I have no complaints, and I think your writing has improved. I don’t believe you need to rewrite the story as it is very good as it is. I believe if you were to post everything on here on royalroadl it would stop most of the haters. We as the readers were impatient and confused by the story and lashed out. I apologize for myself and hope that others who showered your story with negativity do the same. Please consider continuing the story as you still have people who want to read it and enjoy reading it.

  11. Hope you feel better in the future and continue, but if not so be it, and remember the sad truth is that no matter what you do someone out there will hate, bash or insult what you do, so don’t pay to much attention to it, but that’s easier said than done.

    Ps. Good luck with everything, live long and prosper and may the force be with you. (And all the other shebang)

    :)

    1. Oh and take a break and try to relax
      (Marathon all seasons of a show on Netflix or something is my idea of relaxing by the way :( )

      Ps. I know it’ sad

        1. Me too I live in Saudi Arabia, no Netflix, holo, extra if you want to buy a VPN client or torrent them, vpn+Netflix subscription=$$$ and I’m a broke college strident,
          So option 2 for me (no HD). :(

  12. What really are you really gonna stop and dropped “Beast Fiend”? To be honest I just started to read “Beast Fiend” and I like it and enjoy it. You added the twist recently to the story makes it more interesting.

    LIL SPOILER:

    I was glad that his girls was always had been loyal to him. And that they had been remain/ safe from being touch by another man.

    1. I will probably continue some time in the future, but right now I am taking a break. I have other ideas I want to write about, so another fiction may pop up later.

  13. Thanks for putting this awesome story back up(words are difficult to express my self in so) πŸŽ‰πŸŽ‚πŸ˜‹πŸ‘πŸ» and to the trolls do this πŸ˜ˆπŸ”« boom!!!! Spat understand?

  14. I’ve always said im pretty hard to please when reading any FF but this story had me pretty much entertained.

    Yeah i would have also joined the ragers people when i read until chapter 27 but im a lazy gal so after reading what everyone said i was like ‘they already said what was on my mind so i will wait til this is over to write something’

    It saddens me to see that you will stop writing this but in someway i can only wish for you to learn from this experience…i mean im not gonna say i like what everyone said but 50/50 they are all on the spot…

    *Radical plot twist was way overboards sorry :/
    *Bloodborn people was just like a whorehouse? With multipurposes?
    *Bitch1/Bitch2/Bitch3 just walked out of all the shit like it was just a fun ride im dissatisfied with their VERY LOW punishment.

    After all that at ch.30 the so called punishment on those 3 dissapeared and they were acting as if it never happened :(

    At ch.32 i can tell everything was fine once again and i was once again enjoying the story but i couldnt help but curse every single action of the 3xBitches ….i feel that i would have been able to keep enjoying this after ch.32 but alas…seems all the haters attacked and actually won. Sad to know that was the outcomen ;(

    Anyway i would have loved to keep reading this but it seems thats useless now :<

    1. Actually, I got the next chapter written. I may not be updating it as regularly as before, but I don’t intend to abandon it completely. I just don’t want to dedicate all my energy to a fiction that gets so much negativity. I am writing for my own enjoyment right now.

      What people don’t understand is that I try to think differently from most fictions. This story is about a person to whom both time and life mean little, as he is practically immortal, living on after he dies.

      Also, he treasures what happens within the lifetimes more than the lives themselves, enjoying the good things and trying not to focus on the bad. Besides, whatever the girls did was for the sake of people, trying to save as many humans as they could. They also did it to make Zern King and grant him power.

      It’s just people don’t seem to understand the mentality Zern has. I know it is my fault as I don’t make it obvious through my writing, what kind of person Zern is. But I tried making readers understand that he tries to do his best, and encourages others to do the same. It’s just I may not be as good as I think I am. I am sorry you dislike whatever I write, I will strive to do better.

      1. You worry too much about the haters, they just bah because they cant do a story as succesful as this one lmao.

        On the other hand im aware of Zern nature but with his morals and all the “you are under my protection from now on” phrase he told the bloodborn we all thought he would at least have more care for them, but after all that its just as if they were disposable pieces :( leaving that aside you gotta consider the bloodborn PoV’s i mean an action such as than one is a sure method of Hatred and as you know once the circle begins its hard to close it….i find pretty hard to think the bloodborn are just mindless people whose future will be that of(excuse me once again) fuck toys :<

      2. By the way i never said i didnt like what you write was enjoying it so far as the 3 bitches(sorry i hold grudges pretty hardcore >:)) existence was the only annoyance due to the low grade punishment… im sorry if it sounds repetitive but for me that punishment sounded like:

        “Hey girls imma hit ya in da butt you will experience some pain, then i’ll heal ya so you dont remember the pain and afterwards im just gonna say something cruel but will have no true effect” which can be translated to the examples of murderers/rapist/thieves/drug dealers…. if you catch em and free them after a warning…its more than 95% probability that they will do it again, thats why we humans are ridiculously stupid :( we need a good experience in order to learn and hitting them IMO is not realy that good :(

        1. Well, I was trying to make a harsher punishment, but words didn’t come. I did it as bad as I could, but Zern is just not that kind of person. Although right now Lilith is having her butt whipped frequently for the other two, and who knows what will happen once they all become sexually active. There is a dollar for Eleanor, that’s for sure.

          And about the Bloodborn, they are not specifically fuck toys. In fact, they are working a lot and have little time for their relationship/sex. What happened with the king, I changed, so they are untouched as far as I know. They all were divided amongst girls, by their preference, whether they would like to be assassins or spies to do things peacefully. Their importance is paramount just about now. And I’ve changed around that they weren’t abused.

          What is to be said about them, they were thoroughly broken, taped for days and weeks. A single instance of rope can break a person nowadays, but those were taken many times over… Right now they all seem fine, but they are totally dependent on Zern. He protects them, but he is not going to be babying them for ever. They are free people. They can go and be free, but their emotional stability lies with Zern, who saved them and killed their captors twice.

          He is revered like god amongst them, even among the smarted ones. What is yet to come is unclear, but if they get the chance they will throw themselves at Zern, that’s for sure. Although in demon territory anything might happen, they might find somebody else to love.

          1. First of all im glad you didnt quit ^^, im happy to still have this to look for :)

            Second: i swear this is my last QQ but also take it as a pointer with the thingie about the bloodborn magically not raped after all you’re doing the only thing i can believe was a good pointer from all those trolls/ragers and that is how fast you turn the story from white to dark and with this its from dark to white :/

            What i would say is the same keep your ch. As they were after all its already done and no use on changing it unless it is getting published where in order to get more fanbase you need good critics*

            With that i repeat im happy to know you are back on track but i will keep hating those 3 girls no matter what sowwy, as i said IMO their punishment was not that great. Im a bitch i know already, with this im going passive mode again in this place ^^, unless i really get the need or im not being lazy with my smartphone :D

  15. to be honest i ended having a wtf moment and nearly cursed you but tragedy builds character and i found it (the plot twist that is) devastating but
    no one knows the characters like the author does keep up the writing. by the way i only reserve my comments for things i find important

  16. I came here as soon as I see the “An Update” from you about Beast Fiend on RoyalRoadl. I’m glad to hear you haven’t completely abandon it cuz I want more xD.

  17. I have been reading your story since the beginning, being a silent reader and sometimes leaving a comment or two and I got to say I thoroughly enjoyed your work, and it’s one of my top 5’s to read.

    When you mentioned this website I hastily came over and continued to read on, and I slightly understand RR being a pain in the ass sometimes so I’m glad you’re continuing on here.

    You’re doing a fantastic job and I especially enjoy your other story greyskin as well as your other one shots.

    Can’t wait for more good luck

  18. I’m also a silent reader firstly I must said I really like your current seri and although you said That you well not give a schedule It would be cool to have something like a massive release( juste my personal felling) but what I really want to know is :do you plan to develop promiscuous half-breed ?? Because I really liked the introduction and couldn’t help but tjink about what will happen after he obtain is freedom…so please tell me your plan in order for me to not have too much hope..

    1. Well, I did start to write a second chapter, but in there I turned MC into a god and made him have sex with many girls for no reason. I don’t know if I was drinking that day, but it was kinda silly.

      I am having problems with my iPad and that pisses me off a fair bit. Writing is not going great right about now. I don’t think I will be able to start writing up yet another story, although I might be able to do infrequent releases in the future. I am planning to write each of the stories I have ideas for, but I don’t want to spread my mental capacity over too many things and fail.

      Sorry if you are expecting that I am going to start another series, I kind of have hands full with the two main ones. But be sure that some time in the future, promiscuous half-breed will roam the world and act promiscuously.

  19. Oh !!! Too bad I would have liked oh well I understand your problem and respect it because I tried to write my own story but it was fucking hard lol … and what about a massive release of fiend beast ???? :):):) to tell the truth I fell like your story is becoming more and more interesting and I hope that it will continue(don’t forget the massive release) so good work(and please do a massive release ) and oh I forgot it would be great if we could have the pov of the girl(like lily during the “punishment” or eleanor and also the bloodborn) I think that It will girl more depth to the story(sorry if I sound like a editor that just how much fan I’m of your story)

  20. oh my god i cant believe that i stopped reading it at chapter 4(months ago on royalrodl,it had 12chapters)
    i didnt like it because there never were any talks from character to character but it still had a high level of grammar and story itself on a site such as royalroadl(amateursite but there are a few high level stories such as yours)
    and today i read some comments after i found your new story in the updatesite greyskin(didnt read it thought giving a second try to beast fiend because of the huge ammount of chapters and the many good reviews)
    and woah it became amazing
    im on chapter 11 and damn its good
    the only thing that sucks for me is that i read about 2 fucking spoilers ._.
    1 from a reviews about the huge twist in chapter 28(and there were other stories listed that similar twists and in most of those the females were kidnapped or killed or raped or even worse<<extremely dark) and the other from yourself in the greyskin comment section about dragons
    so 1 and 2 put together and bamm dragon atack most people dead and mc nearly dead and girls killed some or most or all kidnapped by that scum human king or the demon king(they are alright with rape and slavery so meh)
    maybe even the dragons themselve took the girls or worked together with humans
    well i read in chapter 11 about some future enemies and probably even some of them came and got the girls
    well i had many more thoughts like that through the story
    i love story currently and i can take dark stories
    even netorare and other dark story parts(if there is a good plot reason for that,like the mc grows up better because of that or something)
    but only because i had a time where i loved cheating stories+hard revenge(there are authors who are completely focused on that genre and write nothing else and those stories are damn good and you enjoy the drama extremely)
    well the girls grow on you through the story and it would be shame if they all get killed(at least our wolf-girl should survive and not get raped)
    the good thing is in royalroadl your story only got

  21. oh my god i cant believe that i stopped reading it at chapter 4(months ago on royalrodl,it had 12chapters)
    i didnt like it because there never were any talks from character to character but it still had a high level of grammar and story itself on a site such as royalroadl(amateursite but there are a few high level stories such as yours)
    and today i read some comments after i found your new story in the updatesite greyskin(didnt read it thought giving a second try to beast fiend because of the huge ammount of chapters and the many good reviews)
    and woah it became amazing
    im on chapter 11 and damn its good
    the only thing that sucks for me is that i read about 2 fucking spoilers ._.
    1 from a reviews about the huge twist in chapter 28(and there were other stories listed that similar twists and in most of those the females were kidnapped or killed or raped or even worse<<extremely dark) and the other from yourself in the greyskin comment section about dragons
    so 1 and 2 put together and bamm dragon atack most people dead and mc nearly dead and girls killed some or most or all kidnapped by that scum human king or the demon king(they are alright with rape and slavery so meh)
    maybe even the dragons themselve took the girls or worked together with humans
    well i read in chapter 11 about some future enemies and probably even some of them came and got the girls
    well i had many more thoughts like that through the story
    i love story currently and i can take dark stories
    even netorare and other dark story parts(if there is a good plot reason for that,like the mc grows up better because of that or something)
    but only because i had a time where i loved cheating stories+hard revenge(there are authors who are completely focused on that genre and write nothing else and those stories are damn good and you enjoy the drama extremely)
    well the girls grow on you through the story and it would be shame if they all get killed(at least our wolf-girl should survive and not get raped)
    the good thing is in royalroadl your story only got 35 chapters and here its 55 and if you didnt shorten the content of the chapters
    then a loooooot should happen between the dragon atack and the last chapter
    again i love the story currently
    and until i thought about writing a big comment
    i was totally focused
    again thanks for letting me enjoy my time (hope i will enjoy the next 40chapters and the new story too)

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